Question

Is this a good introduction?

Video games put an effect on peoples lives, and a lot of people enjoy playing video games. The first ever video games was called “Tennis” and after that video games were becoming a big thing. When video games were introduced to the world, every kid and teen loved it, and people would play them all the time. According to many people, video games has helped child’s growth from video games and has helped learning.

Answer 1

I would say everyone instead of "every kid and teen", I would also take away "according to some people" You should not put site sources in an intro. you could just say "video games have tremendously helped the growth of children's brain, they can learn so many things with video games." or something like that! Hope this helps :)

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Answer 2

Answer:almost

Step-by-step explanation:

You should open with an attention grabbing line, then you claim, some background then hint at what the rest of your writing is about not necessarily with facts though, then you can start the first paragraph