Question

I need someone to please tell me if I marked stresses and pauses correctly in this essay. Or if I need to change something. I would really appreciate your help Thankyou!........

Congrats! I have good news for you. You’re one step closer for your perfect ideal job! I’ve been assigned to organize a Day Care Center for the working parents. I’m calling you to offer you a position in this center. I’m aware you have experience working with kids, for this reason, I believed you would be a great candidate for this job. If everything goes as planned, you will be working full time, flexible hours from 8:00 am to 5:00 pm Monday to Friday. You’ll even get a higher paid! Than the school you used to work for. This is not the only good thing about this job, you will also have holiday paid vacations, a retirement plan, benefits like medical insurance, and a few more. Have you ever been in a hurry, trying to get your lunch ready for work? Or have you ever been worried of what to eat, or if you’ll make it on time on your lunch period? Well let me tell you, this is another reason why you’ll love this job. Every day, you will have free breakfast, and lunch all you can eat. Besides all the great things I just mention, this job has. This job, will also help you gain more experience in communicating, interacting with different people, and kids,making it easier for you, in case if in the future you decide to apply for jobs that involve working with kids. I really believe this job would be a great fit for you. Give it a try! You don’t have anything to loose!

Answer 1

Answer: something you need to change is "you'll even get a higher paid! than the school you used to work for" to "you'll even get a higher paid than the school you used to work for". there seems to be a mistake there. also change your mistake to "besides all the great things i just mentioned this job has, this job will also help you gain more experience in communicating, interacting with different people, and kids making it easier for you, in case if in the future you decide to apply for jobs that involve working with kids"

besides all that, your essay was really good. i would've never came up with this essay or your ideas if I were YOU. it was really good. i think your essay is pretty convincing.

Explanation: it's pretty easy what i did. all i had to do was read the article/essay thoroughly from top to bottom and see if it seems correct and then move on to the mistakes and correct them.