Question

What can i add to the paragraph to draw the reader attention

Rain had always looked different from the rest of her family. Her mother had light blue ocean eyes with blond hair that beamed like the sun, her brother had light brown eyes with brown hair as soft as a pillow and her father with beautiful dark brown eyes and golden hair. Feeling like an outsider, rain had always envied her family looks,She was not physically gifted like the rest of her family. But her personality was magnetic, she had that X factor that people used to get attracted towards her.It's hard to explain it in words but there's something really different about her, her aura, her smile

Answer 1

Change “beautiful” to “alluring”. Capitalize the R in “Rain”, you are talking about a specific person. Change family in “..envied her family looks” to “family’s”.
“her aura, her smile, and even the way her fingers felt against ones skin could send waves of chills down your spine. She was as sweet as pie, the kind you’d find walking into a bakery 10 minutes after it opened. Never selfish, full of empathy of not only humans but for life itself.” Not sure where you are wanting to go with your story, but it is very grasping of the mind :).