Question

Read the sentences and the writer’s revisions. Original: My mother dusts the house from the moment she wakes up. She is concerned about the dust collecting on her furniture and books. Revision: My mother dusts the house from the moment she wakes up because she is concerned about the dust collecting on her furniture and books. Which strategy did the writer use to revise this sentence?

Answer 1

The best answer to the question: Which strategy did the writer use to revise this sentence, would be: The writer used the strategy of combining two independent clauses and turning them into one sentence by using the transitional word BECAUSE.

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Answer 2

The best answer to the question: Which strategy did the writer use to revise this sentence, would be: The writer used the strategy of combining two independent clauses and turning them into one sentence by using the transitional word BECAUSE.

Step-by-step explanation:

In order for a writer to accomplish the correct level of fluidity in a text, he/she must learn that using short sentences all the time might not be the best way. There are certain strategies that can be used that would allow dependent, and independent clauses to be joined together as one, in order not to be having to use short sentences that make reading rather halted. In the case here, we have two independent clauses (both have the structures necessary to make them independent as both express ideas that can stand alone by themselves) who express a similar idea. To ensure continuity, and fluidity, then, we can use a transitional word, like BECAUSE to join these two, and that is what the writer did to revise.