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Can someone help me with grammar and make it sound more professional?

Can someone help me with grammar and make it sound more professional?-example-1
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I saw the planet earth as well, and I was thoroughly impressed.

It was getting late, as the moon was shining in the night sky, and they made the decision to drop me off. When we had landed, and all of them were saying their farewells in their alien language, I had a strong feeling flowing throughout my body. I felt like I was leaving the one family I had, and it was ripping me apart.

The next morning, I had expected my parents to greet me with “Where were you last night?!”. But surprisingly enough, they never said a thing about how I was abducted by those aliens. I will never forget the family I had when I was with those green people that one night.
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1. I too also had seen planet earth, and was extremely impressed.

2. As it got late, they decided to drop me off, and while we were landing, they all had said goodbye to me in their alien language. They made me feel like I was leaving a family I never had. They then returned me home in one piece.

3. The next morning, I expected my parents to ask me where I had gone, but to my surprise, they hadn't noticed that I had been abducted by aliens. I will never forget the green people.

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