Question

I had to this assignment for writing class what do you think about it??

Please tell me what I need to do differently thanks.

Answer 1

1. You changed the type of narration in the first sentence you said you were Lizzy and in the second sentence you were story telling third person.
2. The better way to word the second sentence is: 'Lizzy was a senior in high school and had been thinking about going to Harvard university but then plans changed however not for the better.'
3. You can try to find more complicated words to make the text more interesting.