Julle read To Kill a Mockingbird and Romeo and Juliet, the assigned literature for English I, and decided to write a short
narrative with a theme related to parental influence on children's lives.
Read the excerpt and answer the question.
Cathy had gone over this scenario with her mother before. Had she already forgotten that the girls had checked
with their science teacher, Mrs. Greer, before summer break? Mrs. Greer had given them an important tip about low
pressure storms--that they are extremely slow-moving. So if this one started making its moves toward the Teras
shore, the girls would have plenty of time to return home-pronto!
This is julle's revision of the above:
"Mom," Cathy sighed, "we already went over this scenario. Remember, we checked with our science teacher
Mrs. Greer, before we left for summer break. She gave us an important tip about low pressure storms-that
they are extremely slow-moving. So if this one starts making its moves toward the Texas Shore, we have
time to return home-prontol"
For which reason does the revision best suit the advancement of the action?
Because Cathy expresses her exasperation with her mother through her own words rather than through the narrator's explanation
Because readers are introduced to a new character through dialogue rather in through description alone
So readers can evaluate Cathy's cheeky opinion about her mother's suggestions from a third person point of view
So Cathy's internal dialogue can be revealed to readers to assist them with assessing her motives