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One thought bad and vain One who secretly bleeds inside One who is unloved and unclaimed One who was left in the street to die This soul is abandoned and slowly dies each day Says the boy who only wishes his mother didn’t throw him away. Is my poem okay I just need someone to check so I can send it to my school

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Yes! That is good. You could try to fix the first sentence a little like

One thought wicked and vain

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It's just my opinion but I think it's great

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Yes, It's a good poem Btw

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