Question

1) I have always enjoyed nature and being outdoors. (2) Last fall I was taking one of my regular nature hikes, when I thought about how much my friends and family would enjoy the beautiful scenery surrounding me. (3) I wanted to share the beauty of the outdoors with them. (4) When I spoke to my parents they suggested that I take a photography class, so that I could take pictures and share them.

(5) I thought this idea was wonderful, so I enrolled in an evening photography class. (6) I learned how to focus my camera. (7) I also learned how to choose what to photograph. (8) After each class I took my camera and went for a walk. (9) While I walked, I photographed trees, flowers, birds, and more. (10) When I compared the photos, I noticed that they improved each week.
(11) After my final class, I took pictures of a stream, a cardinal, and a snow-covered tree. (12) With the help of my photography teacher, I printed out the pictures and put them in frames. (13) I hung the photographs in my bedroom.
Which sentences can be combined to improve the flow of the narrative?
A) sentences 6 and 7
B) sentences 2 and 3
C) sentences 8 and 9
D) sentences 10 and 11
Please Help!!!!!!!!!!! 45 POINTS

Answer 1

Answer: Sentences 6 and 7.

Throughout the passage, everything rolls smoothly. The punctuation marks are used correctly, and conjunctions are used only when needed. Howevr we reach a bland sentence, "I learned how to focus my camera." Imagine you getting out of school, and your parents asked How was your day? You may respond with It was good. ok...what else, what happened that made it good. Yes, most of us may respond with this because you don't want to dive into the crazy, stressful, test filled day you had, but in stories and in the real world responding with a one noun and verb doesn't help you through anything. If sentence 7, "I also learned how to choose what to photograph." was joined with sentence 6, it would eliminate useless words and avoids any abrubt pauses in your work. The sentence then should say, "I learned how to focus my camera, as well as what to photograph." Now your reader can connect the dots easier and it's not a manual job needed to be done. Hope I helped!