Question

Can someone help me make my essay sound better?

"Overall, the development of Romeo throughout the play contributes to that even though everyone like love, no one realizes it’s a cause of consequences and violence by showing how he was depressed at the beginning of the play and how he was regretful about his decision fighting Tybalt."
I can't think of a better way of stating the theme.
Theme: even though everyone like love, no one realizes it’s a cause of consequences and violence

Answer 1

Btw everything that i edit it will be in all capitals

"Overall, the development of Romeo throughout the play contributes to that(WHAT IS THAT) even though everyone(USE ANOTHER WORD SUCH AS MANY OR A LARGE AMOUNT OF PEOPLE) like(USE ANOTHER WORD SUCH AS ENJOYS) love, no one realizes it’s a(THE NOT A) cause of consequences and violence by showing how he was depressed at the beginning of the play and how he was regretful about his decision fighting Tybalt."

I can't think of a better way of stating the theme.

Theme: even though everyone(LARGE AMOUNTS OF PEOPLE) like(ENJOY) love, no one realizes it’s a(THE) cause of consequences and violence

BESIDES MY EDITS THIS IS VERY GOOD..GOOD LUCK ON YOUR ESSAY:)