Question

I'm writing a story and I want your peoples thoughts on it and do you have any ideas for what will come next? the thing at the bottom is my basic plan for the story but I dunno how to lead up to it.

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Answer 1

I actually quite like the story, and so I must say not blatantly there are a few places you need some commas and one short run on entence

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