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Hey i'm making a song can someone tell me what they think about this as the chores?

I wish i could walk away and leave it all behind me
Go to another world where no one can find me
Thats how i just want to escape it
I wish i could look at my past hold on to the good and throw the rest in the trash
Thats how i want to escape it
Thats how i wish i could escape it

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Very deep meaning, love it! I am not entirely sure of the rhythm of this song, so I won't be able to help as much. I have a few suggestions, but you don't have to use them.

The third line, "that's how I just want to escape it" could be "that's how I want to hide it"

The fourth line, "I wish I could look at my past hold on to the good and throw the rest in the trash" could be "from all the things that brought me down I can't even fight it"

The next lines could be "just take a look at my past, tell me why I can't leave it"

"I just want to find that paradise of peace"

"Through all these tragic memories they keep on bringing pieces"

"That's how I want to leave it"

"That's how I wish to leave it"

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