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Which sentence sounds better using syntax?

1. I would say what makes me feel happy is traveling because time to time, traveling is just something I get to do every year, also exploring new things, and experiencing different cultures.

2. I would say what makes me feel happy is traveling because time to time, it’s something I get to do every year, while exploring new things, and experiencing different cultures.

3. I would say what makes me feel happy is traveling because time to time, I get to travel every year, while exploring new things, and experiencing different cultures.










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All three use the passive voice and extraneous words that add nothing of value. Try it this way:

Traveling makes me happy because every year I get to travel, exploring new things and experiencing different cultures.

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Im torn between 2 and 3. Though, I feel myself leaning more towards 3.

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