Question

Please check my grammar and wording

(bussiness email assignment):



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Dear Pixar Employer,

I was looking for a job and when I found that Pixar is needing a software developer this summer 2019 I immediately put down what I'm doing and applied. It is not just because I found out that it is Pixar but also because I am qualified for most of the requirements.

I am a Computer Science graduate from Northern Alberta Institute of Technology and I have a lot of experience in programming. I know many programming languages like C#, Java, and and a high fluency in C++. I programmed many video games like NBA Live 96, 98, and other games that needs object oriented programming skills. We always tried to provide the highest quality game play and graphics in all of the projects that we worked on, earning us one of the best basketball game at that time.

It is my childhood dream to work with the company who created my favorite childhood characters and now it can be a reality. I did not have good enough skills to draw but what I am good at is programming, and seeing that it is what you need brings me back that childhood dream. I can't wait to put more passion working if i get chosen to work with Pixar.

Sincerely,
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Answer 1

I was looking for a job and when I found that Pixar is needing a software developer this summer 2019, I immediately put down what I'm doing and applied. It is not just because I found out that it is Pixar but also because I am qualified for most of the requirements.

I am a Computer Science graduate from Northern Alberta Institute of Technology, and I have a lot of experience in programming. I know many programming languages like C#, Java, and and a high fluency in C++. I programmed many video games like NBA Live 96, 98, and other games that needs object oriented programming skills. We always tried to provide the highest quality game play and graphics in all of the projects that we worked on, earning us one of the best basketball game at that time.

It is my childhood dream to work with the company who created my favorite childhood characters and now it can be a reality. I did not have good enough skills to draw but what I am good at is programming, and seeing that it is what you need brings me back that childhood dream.I can't wait to put more passion working if I get chosen to work with Pixar.
( It was missing a few punctuation marks and commas) wish you good luck.