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(01.15 LC) Develop and strengthen writing as needed by planning, revising, editing, rewriting, or trying a new approach, focusing on addressing what is most significant for a specific purpose and audience. Rewrite this dull sentence to make it dazzling. Sandra walked across the street.

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To make any plain sentence like the one given more "dazzling", the first thing that comes to mind is perhaps using stronger adjectives that call attention to an otherwise dull action such as a person walking down the street. Also we could reveal some detail about the character or what she's feeling or thinking in order to embed the sentence with more meaning. I'll give you an example:

Sandra found herself profoundly submerged in the tediousness of her routine as she started walking across the street, without noticing the red light.


Hope this helps!

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