Question

Read the excerpt from a student’s essay. As Rainsford leans over the ship’s rail, his pipe slips from his hands. Acting on impulse, he reaches for the falling object, loses his balance, and falls into the dark water below. After this, Rainsford struggles to stay afloat and swim to the island in the distance. It is a difficult task, but after much effort, he lands on the shores. Rainsford collapses and falls into a deep sleep. Which revision would best help expand the ideas in the excerpt? adding a comment noting that Rainsford really should have let the pipe fall into the water adding the fact that Rainsford hears a number of pistol shots as he swims through the dark water adding more information about Rainsford’s past as a soldier and a hunter of wild animals adding more details about the struggle Rainsford experiences as he swims to the shore

Answer 1

d. adding more details about the struggle Rainsford experiences as he swims to the shore.

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Answer 2

The correct answer is "Adding more details about the struggle Rainsford experiences as he swims to the shore".

This excerpt is focusing on a certain episode which occurs to the character of Rainsford. The circumstances of the accident are explained pretty well, but the desperation brought to him is not being conveyed properly. The struggle is mentioned but it's not felt. After explaining all that went wrong, would be best to add details regarding how hard it actually was for Rainsford to solve this situation and how bad he felt. The resolution is given too abruptly in the essay for us to really understand the true dimensions of the incident as it is lacking in detail.

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