Question

Read the sentence.

She met her friends in the lobby, the bottom floor, of the hotel so that they could head over to the refreshing
pool for a cool, brisk swim.
Which is the best revision of this sentence?
She met her friends in the lobby of the hotel, and they headed over to the pool for a cool, refreshing swim.
She met her friends at the hotel's bottom floor, which is the lobby, so that they could head over to the swimming
pool for a cool, brisk swim.
For a cool, brisk, refreshing swim at the hotel's pool, she met her friends in the hotel's lobby on the bottom floor.
The sentence is correct as written.

Answer 1

The answer is A

Step-by-step explanation:

She met her friends in the lobby of the hotel, and they headed over to the pool for a cool, refreshing swim.

Answer 2

She met her friends in the lobby of the hotel, and they headed over to the pool for a cool, refreshing swim.

Step-by-step explanation:

The correct option is the first one. This revision is the most concise, free of redundancy. This means that everything necessary is said with no unnecessary words. When we say that someone is in the lobby of a hotel, we already know that they are on the bottom floor. There is no need to include both lobby and bottom floor in the same sentence. The first sentence is the only one that contains only one of these phrases/words.

Another issue with the original sentence is the incorrect use of commas, and another reason the third option is incorrect is awkward word order.