Question

PLEASE HELP THIS IS DUE RIGHT NOW

Use the paragraph to answer the question.

Camping is fun. It's nice to enjoy the outdoors. Many people like to hike. Some like to swim or fish. There is plenty to do on a camping trip.

Write three to five sentences detailing what this paragraph lacks and how it might be improved.

Answer 1

answer
this paragraph lacks details about the topic. instead of having 3-7 word sentences use 10-20 to make your paragraphs more interesting and appealing. describe more about the topic instead of saying the basics

hope this helps and have a wonderful day :)

Answer 2

ok ill try

Explanation:

this paragraph lacks description and it consists of choppy incomplete sentences. to improve it the author could've stated their claim and asserted reasons as to why camping is a good activity. they could give credible evidence, for example: "camping is a good activity, because it helps you problem solve and interact with your family. an article states that 87 percent of people who go camping have had a good experience with their family." the paragraph also doesn't have a proper introduction or conclusion.

**also i couldnt find any real evidence so that was made up, pls dont actually use that, it was an example :D