Elijah has too many ideas in his paragraph. With this single jam-packed paragraph, he’s provided too many details and no real focus. Elijah needs to decide what his most important idea is and place it

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asked Jan 5, 2021 217k views

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Elijah has too many ideas in his paragraph. With this single jam-packed paragraph, he’s provided too many details and no real focus. Elijah needs to decide what his most important idea is and place it prominently in his first paragraph. Then he should move the other ideas to the following paragraphs and provide details to support them.