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I have this so far. what can i add so it has more sensory details and what can i do to finish my essay

You could tell she was old of age- LOOKING AT the wrinkles on her face & her low raspy voice, she still somehow found a way to attack the zombie. With the viciousness in her attacks, she defeated the zombie. Even though she defeated the zombie, it’s still a mystery on how she did it. She then came over to me like nothing happened, whispering in my ear she said, “let’s keep this a secret between us.” Her laughing it off, she welcomed me into her delightful, cozy ghostly home. Her house was old, but she had a warm-heart just like her cookies.

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maybe add more description of her appearance and after age add a semi colon

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