Question

I wrote this poem but ain´t sure if it´s correct or ¨good¨. Please help.

The Home That I Know
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Its misted spray
The sway of dancing fish
The danger that it may
A full, diverse dish

Glimmering in the morning
Wild and ain´t in net
Its wild pigment transforming
When it fades in the set

Here, under the Father Star
The Sun-caused golden glow
Draws me from afar,
To the happiness that it shows

And here under Mother Moon,
Its shanks´ glimmering silver glow
I must part, but I´ll be back soon
To the home that I know

Answer 1

i think it's great but in the line 'the sun-caused golden glow' i think gleamed instead of caused would go with the line but up to you :)

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