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If the author of this paper presented his research to a group of biologists, how would sentence 8 need to be revised to have a more formal tone?

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(1) A nature lover and local politician in the area had been trying for three years to capture the moose on video. (2) He finally got footage of the moose crossing a river and walking through tall grass. (3) Wandering the southwest region of Sweden is a mysterious white moose. (4) While other moose are typically dark brown or black, this rare moose looks almost entirely white, with soft white velvet coating, even on its antlers. (5) Many believed that the moose's white coloring was a result of a condition called albinism. (6) This is a condition that causes the loss of pigment, or color in skin, hair, and fur. (7) It is now believed that moose with this white fur have a recessive gene that causes white fur with specks of brown. (8) While this condition is totally rare, these weird white moose continue to pop up across Europe. (9) Their population is increasing in Europe, as moose in this area face few natural predators. (10) In order to protect these ghostly creatures, hunters have chosen to avoid these animals, effectively protecting them, allowing the populations to grow. (11) These white moose have also been seen in various areas of Alaska and Canada but are most common in the vast forests of Sweden and Norway in Europe. (12) With the number of predators, such as bears and wolves, in North America, it is unlikely that the populations of white moose will increase too much. (13) The animals' white fur keep them from being able to camouflage themselves in the forest, making them easy prey.

A. While this condition is rare, these mysterious white moose continue to show up across Europe.
B. The weird white moose are rare, but they seem to be all over the place these days.
C. The white moose are rare and weird, these mysterious white moose are showing up everywhere.
D. While this condition is weird, it isn't stopping these moose from popping up all over the place.

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A is the right answer.

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