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Now you will put what you learned into practice. Remember, some ways to improve word choice include:
Use a thesaurus to find synonyms
Use words that are specific, not vague
Stay away from using verbs like: is, was, were, & are
Rewrite the paragraph below to include more descriptive and colorful language that suggests a mood of exuberance or excitement. Specifically, edit this paragraph for word choice. Feel free to use a thesaurus, but try to maintain your own personal voice. For example, don’t use words you wouldn’t normally use. Make sure to edit for errors in conventions before turning it in.
Paragraph to rewrite:
"I had the best day ever. First, I woke up. Then, I got a package in the mail. I opened it. It was the best gift ever. Then, my aunt came over with a birthday cake and presents for the party. All my friends arrived and we had a good time. I’ll always remember this day."

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I had the best day ever! First, I woke up feeling a little drowsy. Then, I walked out of my house/apartment to look for any mail, once I went out there I saw that there was a package sent for me. I opened the package and thought to myself that this was an awesome birthday gift! Later on, my aunt came over with my birthday cake and presents for the party. After all my friends arrived and we all partied together and had a good time. I never thought I would say this but, "I'll never forget that day".

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You can make it better if you want! ;)

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