Question

Revising for Conciseness - Rejecting Redundancies and PurgingEmpty Words

Concise writing will save your reader time and make your message easier to understand. During phase three of the 3-x-3 writing process, revise for conciseness by rejecting redundancies and purging empty words.
1. Which of the following options are redundancies? Check all that apply.
1) Adequate enough
2) Combined together
3) Big in size
4) Absolutely essential
Determine which empty words can be purged from the following sentence to make it more concise.
2. The Johnson report contained incomplete data that was unfinished.
1) Johnson report" and "incomplete"
2) No revision necessary
3) That was unfinished"
Read the passage, and then answer the question.
[1] This community needs programs assisting those in the reentry process. [2] JUMP High Schools’ efforts to provide better information for newly released juvenile offenders are commendable. [3] Basic fundamental information on reentry services is sorely needed in our community.
3. What types of revisions could be made to the passage to make it more concise? Check all that apply.
1) Purge empty words.
2) Drop unnecessary fillers.
3) Reject redundancies.

Answer 1

Answer (A) - 1 and 2

Answer (B) - 3

Answer (C) - 2

Step-by-step explanation:

There are three sections to this question.

PART A: Rejecting Redundancies

Among the 4 options given in this section, the redundancies are

1. Adequate enough

2. Combined together

Why? Because there is repetition in the phrases! Adequate is the same thing as Enough and Combined means the same thing as Together.

PART B: Purging Empty Words

For the statement given, the option containing the empty words is

3. "that was unfinished"

Why? Because this is the unnecessary phrase that needs to be eliminated from the sentence, not even for conciseness sake but for the sake of proper grammar and better comprehension by the reader.

PART C: Revising a Passage

For the passage given, the type of revision that could be made to make it more concise is

2. Drop unnecessary fillers

Why? Because the second statement in the passage was an unnecessary filler. It contained information that required story telling about the efforts of "Jump High Schools".