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Rewrite the short story so it is more dramatic and descriptive.

Rewrite the short story so it is more dramatic and descriptive.-example-1
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He was prone to disobedience on the playground as a sixth-grader at Elmwood Elementary School. Nobody, not even teachers, could convince him to stop being a bully from kindergarten forward. The first day of sixth school, he looked around the class to see which of his buddies he could trust, when a new girl walked in. She was lovely in Jackson's eyes. He will no longer use bullying as a means of getting what he wants. He offered the lady to come and see the schwith with him during their conversation. The other youngsters were relieved.

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