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The mysterious death
Alan Austen, the protagonist, is in love with Diana, who does not seem to care a bit for his feelings. Through acquaintances, he comes to a potion maker, an old man who lives in Pell Street earns his living by selling potions that are known to cure people’s troubled minds and souls. He wants to buy love potion for a beautiful young lady called Diana. Alan has an exceptionally warped view of what love is.

The professional reasoned that "Alan wanted to buy a love potion, but somehow bought a life-cleaner which harmed that girl and destroyed her life.”

Alan tried to save money for the girl to buy recovery potion for the girl. After years of hard work, he has enough budget for a recovery potion, but when he returns to the store, he realizes it was too late, the old man died few years ago, since he was really old when Alan first came to the store. Diana also died due to the potion and time.

He lost his lover and at the same time was punished as he deserved. A week after the body was found, Alan was jailed, never to be released.

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The mysterious death

Alan Austen, the protagonist, is in love with Diana, who does not seem to care a bit for his feelings. Through acquaintances, he comes to (know) a potion maker, an old man who lives in Pell Street (and) earns his living by selling potions that are known to cure people’s troubled minds and souls. He wants to buy (a) love potion for a beautiful young lady called Diana. Alan has an exceptionally warped view of what love is.

The professional reasoned that "Alan wanted to buy a love potion, but somehow bought a life-cleaner which harmed that girl and destroyed her life."

Alan tried to save money for the girl to buy (a) recovery potion for the girl. After years of hard work, he has enough budget for a recovery potion, but when he returns to the store, he realizes it was too late, the old man died few years ago, since he was really old when Alan first came to the store. Diana also died due to the potion and time.

He lost his lover and at the same time was punished as he deserved. A week after the body was found, Alan was jailed, never to be released.

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The mysterious death

Alan Austen, the protagonist, is in love with Diana, who does not seem to care a bit about his feelings. Through acquaintances, he comes to know a potion maker, an old man who lives on Pell Street and earns his living by selling potions that are known to cure people’s troubled minds and souls. He wants to buy a love potion for a beautiful young lady called Diana. Alan has an exceptionally warped view of what love is.

The professional reasoned that "Alan wanted to buy a love potion, but somehow bought a life-cleaner which harmed that girl and destroyed her life."

Alan tried to save money for the girl to buy a recovery potion for her. After years of hard work, he has enough budget for a recovery potion, but when he returns to the store, he realizes it was too late. The old man died a few years ago, since he was really old when Alan first came to the store. Diana also died due to the potion and time.

He lost his lover and at the same time was punished as he deserved. A week after the body was found, Alan was jailed, never to be released.

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