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Diana Nyad—Marathon Swimmer

(1) On August 19, 1979, Diana Nyad began her historic swim from Bimini, Bahams, to Jupiter, Florida, 89 miles away. (2) Nyad, a veteran of several marathons swims, wants to set a new world record for the longest open-water swim. (3) In 1974 she swam across Lake Ontario from north to south—a difficult crossing because of the swift current of the Niagara river. (4) A year later she completed a swim of more than 25 miles around New York City’s Manhattan Island, she had battled dangerous currents for nearly eight hours. (5) The swim from the Bahamas to Florida, however, would be far more treacherous than anything she had previously attempted. (6) It would require exceptional physical and mental strength.

(7) Nyad, like other long-distance swimmers, knew that every marathon swim is a grueling physical experence. (8) In earlier marathons she had become delirious from the fatigue of continuous stroking, kicking, and breathing. (9) She also knew that her senses would become impaired. (10) Her dark goggles would fog over, making it impossible for her to see. (11) Even though her coach and crew were in a support boat only twenty feet away, the tight rubber swim cap that covered her ears would prevent her from hearing the

coach’s whistle. (12) The salt water would even affect her senses of taste, touch, and smell.

(13) In addition to extreme physical exhaustion, Nyad was aware of the many dangers she would face in the water. (14) During earlier marathons schools of jellyfish had repeatedly stung her. (15) On Nyad’s Bahamas-to-Florida swim, a shark appeared.

(16) Nyad’s crew was prepared with an electronic shark shield. (17) Crew members sent out a wave of electricity that did not harm Nyad but affected the shark and cause them to turn away. (18) Electricity can be used to repel many other kinds of animals. (19) Despite all the obstacles she faced, Nyad successfully reached her goal. (20) She was exhausted but happy. (21) She waded onto the Florida shore. (22) She had endured 28 hours of nonstop swimming. (23) The world record for the longest open water swim was hers!


1. What change, if any, should be

made in sentence 2?

A. Change veteran to Veteran

B. Delete the comma after swims

C. Change wants to wanted

D. Make no change


2. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 3?

A. Change swam to swum

B. Change difficult to dificult

C. Change river to River

D. Make no change


3.Which is the most effective way to rewrite sentence 4?

A. A year later she completed a

swim of more than 25 miles around New York City’s

Manhattan Island, battling dangerous currents for nearly

eight hours.

B. A year later she completed a

swim of more than 25 miles and had battled dangerous currents for nearly eight hours, and it was around New York City’s Manhattan Island.

C. A year later, completing a swim

of more than 25 miles and battling dangerous currents for nearly

eight hours around New York City’s Manhattan Island.

D. A year later she completed a swim

of more than 25 miles around New York City’s Manhattan Island

because she had battled dangerous currents for nearly eight hours.


4. What change, if any, should be

made in sentence 7?

A. Delete the comma after Nyad

B. Insert or after grueling

C. Change experence to experience

D. Make no change


5. What change, if any, should be

made in sentence 8?

A. Change she to they

B. Change continuous to continous

C. Insert a comma after stroking

D. Make no change


6. What change, if any, should be

made in sentence 13?

A. Change extreme to extream

B. Delete the comma after exhaustion

C. Change dangers to danger’s

D. Make no change

7. What transition should be added

to the beginning of sentence 16?

A. Fortunately

B. Hopefully

C. For example,

D. In addition,

8. What change, if any, should be

made in sentence 17?

A. Insert a comma after Nyad

B. Change affected to effected

C. Change them to it

D. Make no change

9. What is the most effective way to

improve paragraph 3 (sentences 13-

18)?

A. Switch sentences 15 and 16

B. Move sentence 17 to the end of

the paragraph

C. Move sentence 18 to the

beginning of the paragraph

D. Delete sentence 18

10. What is the most effective way to combine

sentences 20, 21, and 22?

A. Exhausted but happy, she waded onto the

Florida shore after enduring 28 hours of

nonstop swimming.

B. She was exhausted but happy when she

waded onto the Florida shore, and she had

endured 28 hours of nonstop swimming.

C. She was exhausted but happy, she waded

onto the Florida shore after enduring 28

hours of nonstop swimming.

D. Exhausted but happy when she waded onto

the Florida shore after enduring 28 hours of

nonstop swimming.

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