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When Emma was little, she loved to color. As a busy high school student, she doesn't have much free time. Her swim practice was canceled, so she decided to grab her colored pencils and her little sister's coloring book and get to work. She sat down and began to fill in the blank shapes with beautiful pastels. She decided to head outside with her art supplies. She continued to color in the fresh air, and she felt so relaxed. She heard her mom calling her for dinner. Emma loved spending the day doing something so peaceful.

Rewrite the paragraph above adding transition words or phrases to make the shifts in time frame and setting more clear in at least four sentences. Add at least two transitions to signal a shift in time and two transitions to signal a shift in setting.

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Step-by-step explanation:

When Emma was little, she loved to color. As a busy high school student, she doesn't have much free time. One day her swim practice was canceled, so she decided to grab her colored pencils and her little sister's coloring book and get to work. After running back to her room, she sat down and began to fill in the blank shapes with beautiful pastels. Eventually, she decided to head outside with her art supplies. Once outside, she continued to color in the fresh air, and she felt so relaxed. When she finished coloring, she heard her mom calling her for dinner. Emma loved spending the day doing something so peaceful.

Shift in time transitions:

  • One day
  • Eventually
  • When she finished coloring

Shift in setting transitions:

  • After running back to her room
  • Once outside

There are plenty of ways to write this. This is simply one way I did it. If you get stuck, just re-read the paragraph slowly and try to notice the sudden shifts of the sentences. If it feels off (such as how Emma suddenly went from in her sister's room to outside without explanation), then a transition is needed there.

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