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This is for poetry class and i need some feed back cuz that’s wut it says and I’m at home so yeah.

Have you ever felt Broken. Like there is nothing to live for. No one understands you.
Everyone knows who you are and you have friends but you still feel lonely. Your family always tries to talk to you but you just tell them the same thing “I’m fine, just a little tired”. Do you put on a smile for everyone else around you? Like you have to put a fake face on because if not you will ruin everything. Almost as if you mess up a tiny bit and the whole day is ruined. You try again tomorrow but it happens again. Your in the shower wondering “ if I’m gone, will anyone even notice?” “ will they even be sad?” But when you get out you dont lock yourself in you room, instead you put that fake face back on and pretend your happy. Even though your broken inside. Your not living........just existing. Thank you this has been existing.

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I like it but "Your" is supposed to be "You're" like "You're (you are) in the shower wondering...."

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