Question

Which words should be removed from this sentence to make it clearer and more concise?

“The gray and white striped cat ran away when I came in the door, and now it is hiding under my parents’ big bed with the green and blue plaid blanket and the fancy pillows.”

1. You should remove nouns such as “cat” and “bed”

2. You should remove adjectives such as “gray and white,” “green and blue,” and “big”

3. The sentence is fine the way it is.

4. You should remove verbs such as “ran” and “hiding”

Answer 1

I believe the sentence is fine the way it is, the only problem is it is not concise at all. I would say take away the adjectives, because even if it makes this scene for picture-able, it turns it into a run-on sentence.