Answer:
Someone broke into a local Jewelers store yesterday. The owner had just locked up the shop, when a thief with a gun threatened him. The robber told him to unlock the shop and give him all the money from the safe. Then the criminal tied the man up. The police have organized a search for the thief. They hope they can find him in a few days. Doctors are diagnosing the owner of the shop for shock.
Step-by-step explanation:
-Beginning of sentences have to be capitalized
- The use of the word robber is used to many times
-No commas where they should be
-demands is used in an improper way
-treating is used improperly
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