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I was nervous when it was my turn at bat.

Which is the best way to revise this sentence using descriptive detail and sensory words?

Sweat popped in droplets on my forehead, and my heart raced as I waited for the pitch.
I was nervous when it was my turn at bat during the baseball game’s first inning.
I felt that I was getting nervous when I had to take my turn at bat during the baseball game.
I could feel sweat on my forehead as I stood waiting for the pitcher to throw the ball.

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Answer:

Sweat popped in droplets on my forehead, and my heart raced as I waited for the pitch.

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I could feel sweat on my forehead as I stood waiting for the pitcher to throw the ball.

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