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Original Sentence:

Julio grew up loving art and sports and not loving school.
Revised Sentences:
[1]Julio grew up loving art and sports, but he didn't love school.
[2]When Julio was young he loved art and sports, but he didn't love
school.
[3]Growing up, Julio loved to paint and play soccer and didn't like
school.
[4]Though a young Julio disliked school, in his free time he found
great joy in painting and playing soccer.
Which of the revised
sentences is the best revision
of the original sentence?
A. sentence 1
B. sentence 4
C. sentence 3
D. sentence 2

User RushDroid
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2 Answers

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Answer:

B. sentence 4

Step-by-step explanation:

This sentence not only maintains the original meaning but also adds more detail and makes the sentence more engaging by using phrases like "Though a young Julio disliked school" and "in his free time he found great joy in painting and playing soccer".

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Answer: B. sentence 4

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