Directions: Read each of the following paragraphs and determine if the unity, cohesion, or development needs to be improved and then use the Text Editor to explain how the problem can be fixed. Then, using the information given in each paragraph, write one solid, effective paragraph of your own.
1.It is time for the basketball team to hire a new coach. The team has only won 26 out of 87 games. That is one of the worst records in league history. The team has young players. They also missed the playoffs for the 7th time in 8 years this year. They need to learn the game better. The coach needs to help them win a championship.
2.It is time for the basketball team to hire a new coach. The team has only won 26 out of 87 games, which is one of the worst records in the leagues history. The best record in league history is 77 wins out of 89 games that was set back in 1982. They also missed the playoffs for the 7th time in 8 years this year. There are young players on this team, and they need a leader who can help them learn the fundamentals of the game and build the team into a championship contender.
3.It is time for the basketball team to hire a new coach. They are not good. The young players need a leader who can teach them about the game and help them win a championship.