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Read the body paragraph from an argumentative essay on Louisiana’s economy.

1) Some may say that the state’s economy is not growing as fast as it should. 2) However, people who believe that are crazy. 3) There has been an increase in jobs in the private sector in recent years. 4) Also, the income level for Louisiana’s workers has improved across the state.

What would be the best way to revise sentence 2?

Change it to a more gental tone.
Add a transition to connect the ideas.
Fix the spelling and punctuation errors.
Add vivid imagery or descriptive details.

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A. change it to a more respectful/gentle tone.

User Osukaa
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Answer: However people who believe that, have their own opinions.

Hope this helps!!

I'm sorry if it wasn't good enough. :'(

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