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Highlight the word or phrase that makes the thesis statement wordy.

Elementary schools should not allow cell phones to be brought by
students.
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Final answer:

The word or phrase that makes the thesis statement wordy is 'should not allow'. By replacing it with 'should ban', the thesis statement becomes more concise without losing its meaning.


Step-by-step explanation:

The word or phrase that makes the thesis statement wordy is 'should not allow'. This phrase is unnecessarily long and can be simplified to 'should ban'. By replacing 'should not allow' with 'should ban', the thesis statement becomes more concise without losing its meaning.


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