174k views
1 vote
How do I make this conclusion paragraph better? !!SECOND LAST AND LAST SENTENCE!!

How do I make this conclusion paragraph better? !!SECOND LAST AND LAST SENTENCE!!-example-1
User Stackich
by
7.1k points

1 Answer

5 votes

Answer: I think you should break up the first sentence. Other than that I think it is good.

Explanation: It isn't always good to have a long run on sentence, like you do.

User Toza
by
7.2k points