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Please do this problem for me, just proofread this!

Please do this problem for me, just proofread this!-example-1

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Remove "finely" and just say "and Pokemon Go". Replace do with did in the first sentence. Remove "basically" or replace with "essentially". Insert "such as" in between emerged and nintendo wii U. Change past to passed*

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Answer: Needs more information

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Being a reader I should have to know what the topic is about when I read it but I don't understand what it is about, it is a very fast quick to the point paragraph where it should have more information about how video games evolved.

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