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A slew of sports are too dangerous for teens to play. Some say that sports are good for teens, but others say they are too dangerous. Plenty of sports are too dangerous and should be banned from schools.

Lots of athletes who engage in dangerous sports get many varieties of serious injuries. Plenty of these injuries are life-threatening such as a concussion. Also, bones get broken too many times for it to be safe.

These sports can also be traumatic if someone was to get hurt. If someone was to get a life threatening injury they may be scared to try a sport again. Other times the person may get PTSD (Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder).

Dangerous sports may be able to make people fit and happy. There are many safe ways to become fit and happy. One way to become happy and not do a reckless sport is to find a new hobby that you will enjoy. As well as going to the gym would be a great way to get fit. There is a slew of possible sports are very safe and very effective to reach the same goals you would with dangerous sports.

Finally, sports can be dangerous. Some sports can be very detrimental to many people. It is important that people are aware of what can happen while playing dangerous sports. There are many reasons why these sports are so dangerous and why everyone should be cautious. If things were to change and these sports were to change then the world would have fewer injuries.

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i like it. everything seems fine. i dont see any spelling errors or capitalization problems. overall it seems good. good job.
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