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(1) Last spring I went to visit my aunt and uncle who live in Valencia, Spain. (2) While I was there, I saw the festival called Las Fallas—which means the fires. (3) During the festival, the people in town lit fireworks and firecrackers. (4) Then, at the end of the festival, the town had a parade with floats made from paper, cardboard, and wood. (5) People filled the large floats with fireworks. (6) At the night's end, people lit the fireworks and burned the giant floats. (7) The experience was incredible. (8) The town's people took many precautions to make sure it was safe for everyone. (9) We saw many different things. (10) My favorite part about the festival was when the citizens voted to pardon one float from burning. (11) The town put the "pardoned" float in a museum with floats from past parades. When Joanne began editing her narrative, she decided to move sentence 7. Where is the BEST place for Joanne to move sentence 7?

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Move it to 2 it would probably be the best spot
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The best place for Joanne to move sentence 7 is between sentences 1 and 2. The reason behind this is that sentence 1 introduces what she did last spring (visit her aunt and uncle who live in Valencia, Spain), and this is the best place to express that "the experience was incredible". Then, she continues with sentence 2 and the following ones describing what she did there and explaining why the experience was "incredible".

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