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Can you guys help me fix this introduction ..? The thesis is the first sentence is that right ? Please help me revise this ...

Can you guys help me fix this introduction ..? The thesis is the first sentence is-example-1
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Hi! Lemme help you a bit! :)



Revise:


The two photographs represent poverty. Each photo looks as if they're going through problems. The purpose for these photographs, is to inform the audience of the type of hardships that occured in the world. The intention audience of these photographs are the people.




:) You had a few Grammar mistakes, but in all, great job! I hope you get a good grade and have a lovely day :).

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