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A fortune cookie is a delicious sugary treat! It's usually eaten after the meal in an Asian restaurant and always paired with a positive message that gives the eater hope and happiness," explained Julie to her best friend, Sam, as they walked into Julie's favorite restaurant, The Cookie Box.

The Cookie Box was a family-owned restaurant with excellent food and even better fortune cookies than other restaurants in town. Julie had not been back since her birthday last August because she had a small argument with one of the servers. She was too embarrassed to return.

Sam and Julie took a seat and ordered their food. Once their food arrived, they immediately started to dig in. When they finished, Julie grabbed two fortune cookies. She handed one to Sam, then eagerly ripped hers open. It read, "Watch your back!"

"This has to be a prank," thought Julie. She looked around the busy restaurant, suspecting the culprit was in the room. Suddenly, in the corner of her eye, she saw something, or rather someone. It was Veronica, the same server from her birthday last August. The server that Julie was ashamed to admit, Julie was more than a little rude to her.

On the day of Julie's birthday, nothing seemed to be going her way. Three of her guests canceled on her, the new dress she had ordered had not arrived, and the only thing she thought couldn't go wrong went wrong. She was not able to keep her reservation at The Cookie Box. The waitress who attempted to resolve Julie's reservation issue appeared exhausted and was acting carelessly, so Julie reported her to the owner and left.

And now here she was again, staring loathingly toward her. Julie didn't think it was a coincidence that she got a warning fortune cookie the same day she saw that server.

"She did it," said Julie quietly.

"Huh, who did what?" Asked Sam.

"Oh! Nothing, sorry," replied Julie.

Julie had forgotten Sam was there and decided to apologize and tell him something suddenly came up, and it would be best if he left.

When Sam left, Julie decided to leave as well, she was halfway to her car when suddenly she heard someone calling out to her. It was Veronica. She was chasing after Julie. "You ruined my promotion!" yelled veronica with an angry tone. I felt horrible when I heard her say that. I didn't think that my bad day could ruin somebody's life.

I was so ashamed.

"I am so sorry," I muttered

Veronica scoffed and walked off. Julie didn't bother to stop her because there was no way Veronica would ever forgive her.

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if you mean paraphrasing it then here:

The sweet delight of a fortune cookie is amazing! When Sam and Julie entered The Cookie Box, Julie told him that it was Sam's favorite restaurant. "It's typically eaten after the meal in an Asian restaurant and always accompanied with a positive message that offers the eater hope and happiness," she said.

In comparison to other eateries in the area, The Cookie Box was a family-run establishment that served terrific meals and even better fortune cookies. Due to a minor altercation she had with one of the waiters on her birthday in August of last year, Julie had not returned since. She felt too ashamed to go back.

Sam and Julie sat down and placed their lunch orders. When their lunch was delivered, they got right to work eating. Julie snatched two fortune cookies after they were done. She gave Sam one before quickly ripping open her own. Watch your back, it said.

This had to be a joke, Julie reasoned. She took a peek around the crowded restaurant because she thought the offender would be there. She suddenly noticed something or someone out of the corner of her eye. The server from her birthday in August of last year, Veronica, was there. Julie was more than a touch nasty to the server, something Julie felt ashamed to acknowledge.

Nothing appeared to be going Julie's way on her birthday. The new outfit she had bought had not yet come, three of her guests had unexpectedly canceled, and everything else that she had thought might possibly go wrong did. Her reservation at The Cookie Box could not be honored. Julie complained the server who tried to help her with her reservation issue to the owner because she appeared weary and was behaving irresponsibly.

She then reappeared, gazing scornfully in her direction. The fact that Julie received a cautionary fortune cookie on the same day that she saw that server didn't seem random to Julie.

Julie quietly said, "She did it.

Who did what, huh? replied Sam.

"Oh! I'm sorry, but "Julie answered.

Julie realized Sam was present but chose to apologize and inform him that it would be best if he left because something unexpected came up.

Julie made the decision to leave when Sam did, and as she was halfway to her car, she heard a voice shouting her name. Veronica was there. She was pursuing Julie. In a furious tone, Veronica shouted, "You ruined my promotion!" When I heard her say that, I felt awful. My awful day didn't seem to have the power to wreck someone else's life.

I felt so humiliated.

I mumbled, "I'm sorry.

Veronica grinned and strode away. Because Julie knew Veronica would never forgive her, she made no attempt to stop her.

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