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So I've written a short little note that's going to go in a bouquet of flowers which i'm giving my girlfriend tomorrow. I need to make sure that the punctuation is good and there are no spelling mistakes. I need someone who has had some experience with writing poems and knows where to put punctuation so when she reads it she hears like the flow of words I guess.

I MISSED YOU!
For the past week I haven’t seen you or held your soft hands
This was also completely last-minute and not at all planned
And I worry a lot and I’m annoying it’s true
So, I got you these flowers to show how much I appreciate and love you.

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there may be a few too many syllables in the last line you might want to cut appreciate and write a short little note saying that you appreciate her after the poem
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