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My poem

Your heart has fallen short

you have been my only support

for me without u i feel emptiness

in my crying heart , i will miss u

my friend farewell



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11 votes

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10/10

you could add repeat the the last line ( use of the technique repetition.

use more emotive language and techniques such as metaphors and similes

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