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Need more opinions. Is there anything wrong with this poem? If there is anything wrong, point it out please!!!!

This song is emotional, but not that blue,
I gave you my heart, now you have two.
I gave you my love, as did you,
It warms my heart, to know you love me too.

One day, under the full moon,
I wish to take your heart away, like a thieving goon,
Through your gleaming eyes, gleaming crystal eyes,
You will see a diamond crystal, in a golden tie.

All I want from you, all I wish
Is for you to say, " I love you too "

User Deka
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Answer:

It sounds good to me☺

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User Penpen
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I think it's a great poem, I don't see anything wrong with it.

User Paul N
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