How can I make this sentence sound more smooth? This is a practice essay I am doing. "My head was full of shiny flowing hair and just after five minutes it was gone."

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How can I make this sentence sound more smooth? This is a practice essay I am doing.

"My head was full of shiny flowing hair and just after five minutes it was gone."

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high-school

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"my head had grown a full head of shiny flowing hair and just after five minutes it was all gone..."

David Frenkel answered Jul 8, 2020

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