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What is the BEST way to revise this sentence so that it conveys clear, concise ideas and does not change the meaning of the sentence? I rang the doorbell, but no one came to the door, and I was sure that this was the right address, so I waited, and then I saw a curtain move.

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A possible way to revise this sentence so that it conveys clear, concise ideas and does not change its meaning is by changing the order of some clauses, making more direct and objective:

I was sure that this was the right address. But after I rang the bell, I had to wait because no one came to the door. Then, I saw a curtain move.

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