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LMK what you think about my in-equality essay ...

Here is a bit of a few pages

LMK what you think about my in-equality essay ... Here is a bit of a few pages-example-1
LMK what you think about my in-equality essay ... Here is a bit of a few pages-example-1
LMK what you think about my in-equality essay ... Here is a bit of a few pages-example-2
User Janwo
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Answer: To start off I am not white

Here's my review, the beginning section feels like an attack on white people. Personally, I can be in a room with a white person and feel comfortable because I do not judge them based on their color but by the content of their character. “I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character.” -Martin Luther King. A lot of the language used feels too simple, too repetitious, and I'm not saying use words like "unequivocally," but try to spice up the writing. I agree with a lot of the things that have been typed, such as we are discriminated more against by a whole lot and there's statistics for this and I think you should include some just to hammer the point home. I noticed some parts are phrased weirdly aka "hard to read text."

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3.5 stars, needs more exciting language and better phrasing.

User Roman L
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Bri.......

that was so amazing.......

u did great!!!

i literally agree with everything stated in that essay!

what u wrote literally hit home with me like nothing has ever done before......

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